Hi Dustin. Yes! I think you made a good choice to go for more noir elements. Now Otis looks much more every-man to me, too. He looks distant (his eyes and mouth) and that seems to work with your intended character's communication issues. Leaves lots open and makes me curious about who he is and what he's thinking. (Isn't it amazing that art can convey soo much?) His features are stronger, yet still ordinary enough. Why is one eye blue? And why is there a gash under one eye? Will we learn more in the next installment? Stay tuned, fans. : ) (Not sure about vision and originality right now...think I need to know more, hence 4 instead of 5 stars.)